Monday 28 November 2016

LO5- Reflection




1. Have needs/ expectations been met for the client brief and target audience?

I would like to say that the needs and the expectations have been met as I was asked to write a script for unit 41 which is the documentary unit. This documentary is about the art form Tang soo do and the way it helps people develop the confidence and how the art form has an impact on people’s lives. The masters explained how the team has travelled to Holland and how they perform in the competitions.   I needed to include some form of dialogue and music in the script but also make the script 5 minutes long as the script will need to match the footage.

My target audience for this script is 11 to 18 as Tang soo needs youths to keep the community going. In the script the music relates to the target audience this is because it is hip hop which suits the age demographic also the fact that the team travels which cost a lot of money targets the disposable income of A,B.C1 but the traveling to places in the world acts as escapism for the people in the art.  The script suits the target audience as in the script the team is both genders which covers both gender type and shows that tang soo do is for everyone this is shown in some of the footage as it include girls and boys in the competition which challenges stereotypes and appeals to a wide audience. Both genders are getting judged the same way and the marking is not biased. The Tang soo do script meets the expectations as the script answers are from my masters explaining about the martial art and how the age range will love the art form.

2. What were the clients likes and dislikes?



The client liked it how I have shown the travel of the team and the progression they took through the journey. They also liked how my mode of address suited my target audience as the mode of an address is peer to peer. This is shown in the documentary as the dialogue is set out in an interview way.





The Writers Group also said that the interviews with the masters are in the correct areas and the V/O meant that the interviews also explain what’s happening in the shot and what the terminology is. One thing they said that they didn't like was the way I ended the script as I should include some shots of them maybe lining up or ending the competition. I will be changing this on my script.



It is important to have this feedback so I am able to improve the script and develop the narrative. The dialogue needs to be correct so then the masters can be directed to say the correct things also the footage needs to cut to and cut away in the correct sequence as the editor can edit the documentary. The Writers Group didn’t like it that I didn’t cut frequently. I needed to add more which would mean the pace of my documentary speeds up.



3. What are the relevant changes that need to make to the script?



The Writers Group asked me to change when the music fades in and out so then the documentary has a better atmosphere also the dialogue will stand out a lot more if the music is faded in the background this creates ambient background sounds. The Writers Group also said I need to include more V/O when a master is answering the questions to give the viewer a better understanding of the words they are saying. 




One other change I have to do is the way the documentary ends as they want me to include the team lining up or team traveling back this will help the documentary cut away also it would be a good ending for the documentary. They ask me to include more cut to and cut away but also to include more camera angles when having the interview so the camera isn’t always one direction when the master is talking but also to have many camera techniques so for example the camera panning, camera tracking and camera tilt up and down. But  also include various of camera angles such as high angle, low angle.  



4. Is the content of the product correct based on form and style?



My script layout is for a documentary. You can clearly see that the script is split up for each shot and when the interviews starts with each master and also when I am asking the questions to the master. It is also set out like a documentary as the beginning has a montage to set the scene and it picks up the pace in the middle which slows down again at the end. The documentary has met all the needs as it includes music, dialogue, V/O and location instructions and camera information. The music included is KZ. Pelican and this fades in and out throughout the script.





 The script is a very formal as the people who are in the interviews are very important and speak about important life lessons but also about the art form and how it develops you as a person.  The font all the way through is courier new as that is what most professional scripts are written in but also it is very easy to read. The mode of address in my script is peer to peer as the masters are informing you on the art form. However the informal is because of there dialect and what country they are all from.  The style of the script teaches the viewer about the art form.  The way the team dresses suggest that they are all one and stand together this creates a form of confidence for the team as they overcome any challenge. The suit they wear represents their loyalty of the art which makes the audience respect them and see them as respectful and disciplined this needs to include a range of shot types to support the V/O of the masters speaking.





5. Does the script meet legal and ethical requirements?


My script has no violence, offensive language and inappropriate behaviour this is because the script is aimed more at a younger audience also then no masters or viewers of the short film will get offended. The BBFC will not have a problem with my script as they require no misleading information and my script provides the truth always this makes it PG rating and anybody many watch it.  For example this documentary can be shown before watershed as it is appropriate for a younger audience as it teachers about Tang soo do. No copyright is needed for this documentary as all the companies I have included are actually sponsored by the art form and support it. Also the logo of the region can be used as I have permission from the grandmaster himself. For the music I will be using a guys called KZ. He is a very skilled artist and publishes his music for free however if I want to use it all I need to do is link him into the documentary with this permission I would also need him to sign a release and consent form. My script will not offend anybody as in the script it is mutual all the way through for example HO SIK PAC has a very calming voice which is juxtaposed due to the sport. As my documentary is about fighting the conflict that happens in the documentary will be fine as there is no blood or gore. The locations used for the documentary are all public areas so I am able to film if I wanted to. The only location I needed to get permission for is the Worksop leisure centre. But that was no problem as we are used to training in that location. The masters and all the people in Tang Soo Do agree to be in the documentary so when I’m creating a time lapse they don’t mind being on the camera. The Tang soo do documentary does not include any slander that may discriminate or be harmful to another but the documentary is positive and encouraging about the sport but also to advertise and promote the business for revenue.


LO5- Production Plan


Tuesday 22 November 2016

LO4- Improved Script

In this post I will be showing all the corrections I have made for the script from the feedback that was given to me by the writers group. For example I have included more locations I have also made sure that the script has music in and out all the time. The ending of my script has changed as the team all line up and bow toward the front of the hall. Instead of shots of the team traveling home.
In yellow is where I have changed the script.









For the script I have completly changed the ending due to the script before not having a proper ending this is so the target audience can have a resolution to the ending. different changes improve the way the director may read the scripts as some of the positioning of the writing was incorrect.I had to move dialoque to the middle of the page and display where a lot of the cuts and voice overs are.The various camera angles on the left have been imoproved to the reader of the script will understand the camra angles used.

Monday 21 November 2016

LO4- 5 Probing Questions


Do you understand what my documentary is about by the way my script is set out?

Am I aiming for the correct mode of address and what’s your opinion?

Looking at the script would you say that I am having interviews in the correct times and could I add more or make them shorter?

Does the script suit the purpose of a documentary?

What could I improve to make the script better?

LO4-Evidence of gaining feedback

Me sending the 5 probing question for the feedback on the script.
I have had an interview with the writers group about my script and how I could improve the script this audio is what they had to say about my script and the images are evidence that the interview happened.
These are the notes I wrote down when I had the meeting with the writers group.

In this interview I received all the information I needed to make the script better and make it more interesting. Also the interview gave me an idea on how I might improve the script and add more features in the script.


Photo of the interview

LO4- Production Plan