LO4- Improved Script

In this post I will be showing all the corrections I have made for the script from the feedback that was given to me by the writers group. For example I have included more locations I have also made sure that the script has music in and out all the time. The ending of my script has changed as the team all line up and bow toward the front of the hall. Instead of shots of the team traveling home.
In yellow is where I have changed the script.

For the script I have completly changed the ending due to the script before not having a proper ending this is so the target audience can have a resolution to the ending. different changes improve the way the director may read the scripts as some of the positioning of the writing was incorrect.I had to move dialoque to the middle of the page and display where a lot of the cuts and voice overs are.The various camera angles on the left have been imoproved to the reader of the script will understand the camra angles used.